Korrektur Englisch Diary Entry

  • Vielleicht noch etwas zum Inhalt, damit es leichter zu verstehen ist: Die Frau, die den Tagebucheintrag schreibt, lebt in einer Welt wo man Heirat und solche Sachen nicht kennt, es ist auch verboten sich in eine bestimmte Person zu verlieben. Sie verliebt sich aber trotzdem in einen Jungen der aus einem Reservat kommt und dort ist es noch üblich zu Heiraten wenn man jemanden wirklich liebt. Und auch so ist er von seinem Charakter her ganz anders als sie.


    Dear Diary,
    This stupid Savage! He is such a weird person, I cannot understand him. How can he do this to me?
    First I thought this would be a really great day because John told me that he really loves me. But then he was talking about such crazy stuff I could not understand, about some weird things they do in the reservation he comes from, like the marriage or something like that. I did not know what he was talking about and that made me furious. But anyway I wanted him so much and I wanted to make love to him but instead of return my feelings and kiss me he was hurting me, slapped me, called me a whore and even threatened to kill me. I locked myself in the bathroom. Due to some reasons, maybe because of the telephone call he got, he suddenly was gone. It was so aweful. How could I fall for such an aweful person? He is so different. But even after this incident I cannot stop thinking about him...
    I know I am not suppost to feel such feelings, but I cannot stop them...


    -> Ich hab immer ziemlich Probleme mit den richtigen Zeiten, also wär nett wenn ihr mal drüber schaut und irgendwelche Fehler korrigiert :)
    Danke schonmal :)

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    Dear Diary,
    This stupid savage! He is such a weird person, I cannot understand him. How can he do this to me?
    First I thought this would be a really great day because John told me that he really loves me. But then he started talking about such crazy stuff I could not understand, about some weird things they do in the reservation he comes from, like the marriage or something like that. I did not know what he was talking about and that made me furious. But anyway I wanted him so much and I wanted to make love to him (sicher, dass du hier "mit jmd. Liebe machen" meinst? Im Sinne von Sex?) but instead of returning my feelings and kissing me he hurt me, slapped me, called me a whore and even threatened to kill me. I locked myself up in the bathroom. For some reason, maybe because of the phone call (phone call ist umgangssprachlicher, daher mMn eher angemessen für Tagebuch) he got, he suddenly was gone. (was gone meint "war (auf einmal) verschwunden". Wenn du meinst, "ging er auf einmal weg", nimm "went away") It was so awful. How could I fall for such an awful (hier vielleicht ein anderes Wort, awful hast du gerade schon verwendet) person? He is so different. But even after this incident I cannot stop thinking about him...
    I know I am not supposed to feel such feelings, but I cannot stop them...

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